This is, quite honestly, one of the best BDSM stories that I've read. A lot of other BDSM stories go straight for the actions (the kink) rather than the relationship dynamics of a healthy BDSM relationship. And, for me, that type of story leaves me kind of cold. However, what you've done here is excellent -- you've intertwined the dynamics with the actions, which is a huge part of getting the reader (me) into the story and bonding it so closely to the guys.
Several times during the story, I had to catch my breath because I was getting so pulled into Jared's and Jensen's headspaces. (This is a good thing! *g*)
*fans self* I'm not in the BDSM scene per se, but it felt to me like Jensen was very definitely doing the right things even as an untrained top -- I could feel them slotting into place for Jared as I read. And the ending hit a great balance, with Jared asserting himself outside the sub headspace by asking Jensen to come to bed and Jeff waiting outside in the car to make sure Jared was all right.
Other people much more experienced than me have commented on the actual mechanics of the scene, so I won't go there, but I have read those discussions in the comments and been fascinated by the analysis.
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This is, quite honestly, one of the best BDSM stories that I've read. A lot of other BDSM stories go straight for the actions (the kink) rather than the relationship dynamics of a healthy BDSM relationship. And, for me, that type of story leaves me kind of cold. However, what you've done here is excellent -- you've intertwined the dynamics with the actions, which is a huge part of getting the reader (me) into the story and bonding it so closely to the guys.
Several times during the story, I had to catch my breath because I was getting so pulled into Jared's and Jensen's headspaces. (This is a good thing! *g*)
*fans self* I'm not in the BDSM scene per se, but it felt to me like Jensen was very definitely doing the right things even as an untrained top -- I could feel them slotting into place for Jared as I read. And the ending hit a great balance, with Jared asserting himself outside the sub headspace by asking Jensen to come to bed and Jeff waiting outside in the car to make sure Jared was all right.
Other people much more experienced than me have commented on the actual mechanics of the scene, so I won't go there, but I have read those discussions in the comments and been fascinated by the analysis.