I think you're absolutely right about the "Sir" and diversion issue, and about his personal risk by choking a human killing machine. I've definitely got some re-writes to do, and i'm so glad you pointed these out. I may have gotten so excited about writing and so caught in the moment that all the stuff in my head didn't make it to the screen.
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Date: 2010-01-12 03:43 am (UTC)Thank you so much.
-J