Date: 2008-02-13 12:34 am (UTC)
^ This icon is the opposite of appropriate.

Whee, I've been lurking for a few days hoping for an update.

Jensen's thoughts are kind of painful to read, but that's testimony to how well you write it. Being quite crazy myself, it all rings true and a little too close to home, the way thoughts run on and you can't really be sure if you're saying crazy things deliberately or if that's all that's left in your brain now. Well done.

He walks all over the apartment and opens all the cabinet doors and tries to sleep for a while but it’s no good. He takes another bath and tries to touch himself happy again but he worries about Jared and all the people who aren’t safe at Jared’s place with food and warmth and a bathtub and his thing won’t work.

When he gets out of the tub he notices the mirror by the sink and the man who moves around in there. He knows the man is him but he never saw him before or he did but he didn’t really look. He stares for a long time at the stranger in the glass. His eyes are green and he has tiny dark flecks on his pale skin. Jensen touches his eyebrow and the man touches his and they are the same person and it makes him shiver how weird it is to have an outside person.

He pulls his hair back and touches his face. He tilts his head to the side and tries to see what the other angles of him look like. He scratches the mustache under his nose and the beard along his jaw and tries to think who he’d be without those and if he was smooth like Jared. Would he know that guy or is his face a stranger under a stranger under a stranger.


Yeah. That. It's very good. Sometimes with the craziness I get the feeling of standing over an abyss and the abyss is full of thoughts and speech like that, and it would be very easy to fall in. Beautifully written, and it makes Jensen such a believable character.

I really like your Jeff character, too. He's such a good guy. Same as what I liked about your Jeff in 'Finding Something Right'. Probably that's part of the appeal of the hurt/comfort genre, the hope that there'll be someone comforting out there. Sweet.
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